How did you build the suspense in your story?
First Phil heard creaking noises, then creepy nursery rhymes then foot steps.
First Timmy J.R sat down and the chair leg snapped.
I used phrases such a ‘Amy whimpered’ and ‘Slowly she creeped along the long corridor turning her head occasionally to check the cook was still there’
Leslie herd strange rustling then a thud and mysterious footsteps…
Dave heard faint creeks and foot steps… He was not alone
Mummmm! Moaned Amy
The two girls went in to the lift and then looked in the smashed mirror a scary doll appeared, they looked at each other then looked at each and then they looked at the ground and the doll started singing ring a rosie.
Ginger and Calli heard footsteps getting louder and louder.
My story is about a soldier called Sam who’s 32 years old,Sam is a brave and fearless character in my story.
I used varied sentences and descriptive words to build suspense.
First the metal chair leg snapped.
as they walked through to the kitchen, it was nothing like they saw through the miserable window. [josh]
the fox was staring at me stan
Someone tapped on Amy’s shoulder.
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